Maybe in person it works visually.

Seems pretty pedestrian to me. And the first sentence -- passive voice?

Not saying I can do better. But surely someone can.

IMO

I've been working to correct my common use of passive voice in my writing for the past several months. I never paid much attention to it before. It is just a style and/or a preference thing, but it's one I would like to avoid. It's a tough habit to break, though.

Good for you!

I know what you mean -- I've been trying for years, and my success has been only partial.

It's ironic: the worst practitioners of passive voice I know are college professors. I see it every year: students who enter college more effective writers than when they leave. Good writers are more likely to get worse (especially with regard to something like passive voice) the longer they stay in higher education. It's amazing.

Amazing and annoying as hell.

Because, actually, it isn't just a style or preference thing. The more passive voice you use, the less effective you will be when you write. The more you use it, the more likely your reader won't listen; and even if they listen, the less likely they will take away and take action that you want them to do after reading.